2nd batch - multiple proofing amends
When exporting, lose headers of each clause but keep the numbering. If possible the numer will be on the same first line as the clause ie
“32. The parties agree that….”
If we can bring in the section headers from the left hand column into the exported doc that would be great –
The first left hand column heading before 16 “Lump sum” – change to “Basis of lump sum order”
5 – start bullet e with upper case The
13 – end of para (a) change semi-colon to full stop. Samer at end of (b) and (c).
18 – at end of first option box in (a) its exporting without a space before “but not for obligations…”
19 – PROBLEM – if you don’t choose all the (a)-(e) options, say only a, b, and e, its not autocorrecting the numbering on export – if easier change to un-numbered bullet points. This problem crops up again in a few places – I’ll signal it for brevity with [***]
22 – insert colon before the bullets.
28 – for clarity change opening words “The court declares that the policy” to The court declares that insurance the policy. At bullet point e its taking wrong gender – where it shows “shall show her compliance” its picking up the gender of the respondent – should be gender of applicant. And in last line there’s a double space between “proportions” and the % you input.
30 – please join together the two parts of this so it goes “he shall: within 5 days”
31 – after third word “undertakes” delete “to” so its just “undertakes:”
32 – end of first para, insert comma: “pay any contributions, in which event”
33 – start of (b), say you have earlier chosen ‘The applicant undertakes’, it should just read “(b) to inform the respondent within…” At the moment both are coming through.
40 – in the first (a) insert space between “estate as to any” and whatever you insert into the box after that. In the second (a) insert colon after “such liability”
43 – The last sentence should be on its own, ie not conjoined to the second “he shall…” para. And delete the comma after “under the policy”
44 – Move “[FREE TEXT] may release to the applicant” to after “the terms of this order” so it reads So long as the respondent is liable to maintain the applicant under the terms of this order, [FREE TEXT] may release to the applicant such information…”
47 – at (a) if you had chosen applicant at start, the end of (a) should be “covenants by the applicant to leave by will” – at present it is picking up wrong party.
48 – in (a) lower case w and c for will and codicil
51 – make the three lines of £x by DATE bullets. And we should be able to pull in property address options from the definitions
54 – end of first para insert “in” so it reads “secured on it in favour of”
55 – In the line that starts “The applicant’s solicitors FREE TEX shall have” insert space between solicitors and free text box. Below that [***]. And in (4) change “relating professional expenses” to “related professional expenses”
57 – end of first para insert comma after free text £ box so it reads “£xx, such charge”. The long list of bullets underneath that could have bullet points or dashes at the start of each. At end of 4th bullet close space between “period” and the semi colon. In next bullet change “twelve” to 12, and in next bullet insert semicolon at end.
60 – just before the bullet points upper case The for “The respondent/applicant promises”. In the 6th bullet point insert comma after “lease” so it reads “lease, licence…” And in last bullet point insert comma after “copies of orders”. In (a) lower case “orders” and change semicolon at end of sentence to fullstop. Same at end of (b).
64 – fifth word – “his/her” is picking up wrong gender.
65 – in first sentence delete “the” before “annex”
66 – the second word – applicant’s or respondent’s should have that “’s” on end. And halfway through that sentence there is a double “the”
67 - the second word – applicant’s or respondent’s should have that “’s” on end.
68 – the fist word of (a) and (b) should be upper case – “Upon” and “Any”. Change semicolon to fullstop at end of (a) and delete “and”. In (a) the percentage is exporting with a rogue space between the figure and the % sign.
69 – Change opening words to “The PRPA shall pay to…”. As above, the percentage is exporting with a rogue space between the figure and the % sign. Change semicolon at end of first sentence to fullstop.
70 – again, the percentage is exporting with a rogue space between the figure and the % sign. There’s a double space after “annex”.
72 – third sentence – there’s a doublespace after “commence”
74 – Third sentence should start with upper case “The”. Points iv, v and vi shouldn’t be numbered so – they are just plain old sentences. And in what was vi, pluralise “percentages”
76 – in (i) close the bracket after “…National Insurance by the applicant)” and there’s a double space after “to the [resp/app]” near end of that sentence.
77 – there’s a double space at end of line 2 between “[weekly/per calendar month]” and “in”. Also double space after “commence” in sentence below. Also rogue space before “They shall” in next line. And at (b) below delete “or” at end of line. And in (d) there’s a double space between “application in relation”
78 – as above, there’s a double space at end of line 2 between “[weekly/per calendar month]” and “in”. Also rogue space before “They shall” two lines below
80 – remove “upwardly” from title and “upwards” from first sentence (so it reads “shall be varied automatically”. Insert colon at end of first sentence. In (b) insert space between first and second sentences.
81 – At end of last proper sentence before the second set of bank details, close the bracket so it reads “notified by the respondent in writing):”
83 – in the second sentence delete “below” so it reads “lump sum at order X for the”. And add in a fifth option in the first drop down box “upon the parties complying with their respective undertakings and agreements to pay into the fund” – which, if taken, would lead startight to “for the children’s education…”
84 – there’s a double fullstop at end of first sentence if you take the termly option
85 – second sentence – double space in “alleged arrears”
88 – child name options not coming up and “costs of his/her disability” ought to take child’s gender from definitions – but whether it’s worth adding this into the definitions for such a small benefit I don’t know…
89 - at end of second sentence delete the option box so it just reads “a calculation total:” then it carries on with the two “whilsts” as before.